Alfred Said:

PROOFREADING ESSAY--COMMAS?

We Answered:

If you are having trouble with commas or anything, you should get someone to proofread your work. But for free, on yahoo answers?? Hmm. You should check out some proofreading services online, it's pretty cheap and gets done quick, I use it for my college essays. Check resource box for the one I use.

Chester Said:

Is this good for an introduction paragraph for essay?

We Answered:

A paragraph is a group of sentences that speak to a single subject. This is an entire essay wrapped into one paragraph.

Your opening paragraph should explain what you plan to talk about and should never be that long. paragraphs should generally not exceed 6 lines or people wont read it.

Try an opening like -

Computer technology has evolved dramatically over the years and has significantly changed the way our society interacts. Research, social interaction, and shopping have been revolutionized through the magic of the computer age.

Now write one section on those three subjects

1) Research
2) Social interaction
3) Shopping

follow this up with a conclusion/summary

Mattie Said:

Is this essay alright...?

We Answered:

Hi. This is a good essay, especially for such a short time learning English. I have just tidied it up a bit for you.

Volunteering is one of the best things we can do with our time. It keeps us active, we help each other and gain experience in a specific job area. Students should be required to volunteer in order to know how it feels to enter the working world after graduation.

One of the reasons why volunteering is good, is to get experience in some jobs. When you are volunteering, you can see how that job works and sometimes you can learn something new or practise previously learnt skills. When volunteering, you can search for something that interests you. Then, while you are there you may decide that this is what you want to do for the rest of your life.

Also, another reason why volunteering is necessary is because it keeps you active. In volunteering you use your time to do good in the community; you are keeping yourself out of trouble, in a safe area helping people. You can meet more people of all ages, old and young, depending on where you choose to do your volunteer work, and make new friends.

Finally, but no less important, a reason to do volunteer work is to help people in general. There are many people in need who could use our help – if we can make them feel better, we should do so. Some of these people could be old or sick and they could just want someone who can stay with them. In addition volunteer work makes us a better person, and can be very rewarding. Yes, work without pay can be hard thing to do, and more so when too many people have days spent busy doing homework, studying or working. However, the experiences gained should off-set that disadvantage. From community involvement, to helping ain an insight into a career, it is clear that volunteering allows us to gain great experience.

In conclusion, volunteering through school is a good strategy for high school students because they can learn more about potential career paths just by trying it out. It will also help people in need and, most importantly, the student will recognise what volunteering means to others and will receive all the rewards that go with that. The opportunities that volunteering provides are endless, as long as the personal motives are positive and good. As Mahatma Gandhi said, "Be the change you want to see in the world".

I hope this helps!
P.S. I'm in the UK ;)

Travis Said:

what can be a good title for this essay? any suggestions on what else i can add to make it longer?

We Answered:

your opening paragraph leaves the reader questioning about why did you add all the extra stuff about what diseases do they treat and prevent, what are the day to day difficulties. if you want to leave it how it is, i would take out the whole first paragragraph, and redo it on where Dr. Martinez works, moreon her, and why she became a pedi DR. other wise youre kinda left wondering where the other information you talked about in the beginning is. But, if you say add a paragraph on each of those topics, it would show more on her job, what she deals with, and she helps prevent them, and it would make your paper significantly longer. the rest was excellent, but the first paragraph definitely clashes with the rest of your paper, and leaves you hanging in the end. then you could call the paper, A Day in the Life of DR. Martinez